DC Girl
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Great poem/prayer. |
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cowgirl
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The first part may be yours, but the last sentence is almost word for word from the Bible. "I will lie down and sleep in peace, for you alone, O Lord, make me dwell in safety." |
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thesurf_doc
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GOOD! |
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theriddle
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That's not a prayer or a poem. It's a suicide note. |
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fabby
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Simple and sweet! Please check spelling though! You could play around with rhyme patterns in future.
Try visiting poetry.com for free help! |
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killeracid88
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It's nice but it kinda sounds like u want to die. |
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Kia
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I think it is a very nice prayer/poem , it really gave me a since of peace and serenity. God Bless and continue to write for God. |
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tweetheart82
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I write poetry and that is not poetry although it is very nice to go in a book of bible prayers for children and adults. |
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Jessiekat
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Beautiful! |
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Lovely Lady 27
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I like it. Gave me a peace about me. Good job. Check spelling if you turn it in somewhere. But very nice. |
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christianupshaw2006
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really good
love it so good |
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FREDDIE BOY
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it is good |
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brnydbbn
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This is quite a good poem. It may have sounded better if you made it rhyme. Apart from that it is excellent! |
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yellowsmiley
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it doesnt really sound like a poem, it sounds like it belongs in the book of Psalms, its good, it could fit right in |
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kat_pandora
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i thought it was good. i write a little my self and i find that what matters the most is that the poem shows how you feel. i would revise a little and sumittit to a cuople of poetry contests to see what6 they think. i had 5 offers on two of my poems and am thinking about publishing them my self. |
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demi
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very deep and thoughtful..well done!! |
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bluestartx@sbcglobal.net
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Sweet poem/prayer. I liked it- I'm sure the Lord liked it too. You might ask him for a little help with your spelling
;-) JUST TEASING! |
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bat1560
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It's good up until the close. I read it several times; not sure where you are going? Maybe it the use of the word "only". If you are thankful, be thankful and lay at peace for whatever may come. |
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