nightevisions
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It's short and to the point. The pain comes through uncomfortably.
It leaves no doubt about what it's about, yet leaves a lot to the imagination. I'm assuming the author meant to make the reader feel something, especially pain, grief and loss. If so, they accomplished their goal.
I'm interested in the "weird" book you found it in. What book? |
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pumpkin
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It's a little juvenile - study poetry by some of the "big names" - I suggest you read anything Emily Dickinson or Edgar Allan Poe - they really know how to write the good stuff. I don't know what book you found it in, but it's really not much there to get a handle on, is it? |
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razielxm
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I've never been a fan of free form poems. |
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MissKathleen
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I think it's a good free style poem about the pain of death. Keep on writing!! |
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Dark Mousy
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??????? |
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Royallady1947
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I don't like it. How depressing it is! |
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rocky
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eh, not too enjoyable to read |
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Dustin W
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this is a peopm about death. i think that you need to tell someone and get help. |
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lala
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its really dumb its not a poem its the devils work |
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checkocheckochecko
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I'm not sure, is seem's like something maybe is dying inside of you right now. It's too depressing. Or, did he really die. Either way, if your in a rut, get out and either do something or go buy yourself something. I think you need a change right now... Dr Checko... (Nickname) |
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planksheer
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Maybe its in the delivery ? |
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stepheemarie
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It's ok I guess, I'm not into poems like that. |
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raglanwolf
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i guess it depends on what you consider poetry these days. as a function of society, this just goes to show that we don't find anything shocking these days.
it doesn't mean, however, that we have to accept this as a "good" poem, or even a poem for that matter... |
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mebesaturday
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he told you when hes dead... uhm its ok. but why did you kill him? |
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TJ
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sicko |
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Amy
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you betta try writting more happy poems but....that's a ''good'' start keep up!! do you like mine ....Life is a ***** and people are switched!!! |
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jonathonsgurl
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it needs some work but i see promising talent |
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